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雅思大作文主体证明段就得这么写你为啥不听劝

放大字体  缩小字体 2019-12-23 13:26:54  阅读:7630 作者:责任编辑NO。蔡彩根0465

有雅思考生在写主体证明段时不讲结构,没有规矩,观念不明晰,证明不充沛,乃至偏题、跑题。那么究竟是什么原因形成这种情况呢?是他们不知道怎样写作文吗?是他们不去学吗?是他们不去练吗?实际上大都考生都知道,也去学和练怎样写作文,但没什么效果,其底子原因在于他们没有树立起关于怎样写作的认识,没有真实认识到写好作文的真理是要表现出应有的写作结构、办法、手法和技巧等,便是不按套路出牌,一到考试的时分,把学过的、练过的东西全都抛到脑后去了。更有的考生底子就不听劝,不管教师怎样诲人不倦地解说,仍是依然故我,到头来往往总是由于写作拖后腿,跨不过最终的门槛。下面以雅思前考官Simon的范文要点解析该怎样样写雅思大作文的主体证明段。

标题:

Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Simon在范文的开篇提出了明晰的观念:I completely disagree with the idea that these sports are too dangerous, and I therefore believe that they should not be banned. 即不认可标题的说法,不同意标题的观念。那么主体证明部分就应该环绕开篇的观念供给论据,进行证明。下面看Simon是怎样证明的。

Simon范文主体证明榜首段

In my opinion, so-called extreme sports are not as dangerous as many people think. All sports involve some element of risk, and there should always be clear regulations and safety procedures to reduce the possibility of accidents. People who take part in extreme sports are usually required to undergo appropriate training so that the dangers are minimised. For example, anyone who wants to try skydiving will need to sign up for lessons with a registered club, and beginners are not allowed to dive solo; they must be accompanied by an experienced professional. Finally, the protective equipment and technology used in sports from motor racing to mountain climbing is constantly improving safety.

解析:

本段榜首句明晰表述观念:所谓极限运动并非像有些人以为的那么风险,既照应了开篇的观念,又提出了分观念即本段的中心思想,即主题句。随后的第二句经过表述一般知识来支撑主题句,即一切运动都有风险,但经过拟定安全规矩和成序就可以更好的下降风险。第三句从另一个旁边面持续支撑主题句,即经过必要的训练可以把风险降到最低程度。第四句是分句,经过举例从两方面支撑第三句。第五句持续支撑主题句,即保护性技能和设备可以加强安全性。从以上五个语句,可以正常的看到本段的结构是主题句+支撑/扩展句。主题句明晰表达阶段的中心思想,支撑/扩展句进行证明支撑。详细来看,第二、三、五句从三个方面环绕主题句供给论据进行证明,而第四句则是经过详细案例对第三句进行支撑。所以,可以正常的看到,这样来写阶段能做到结构明晰,观念明晰,论据充沛,证明有力。

Simon范文主体证明第二段:

While I support regulations and safety measures, I believe that it would be wrong, and almost impossible, to ban extreme sports. In the first place, we should all be free to decide how we spend our leisure time; as long as we understand the risks, I do not believe that politicians should stop us from enjoying ourselves. However, an even stronger argument against such a ban would be the difficulty of enforcing it. Many of the most risky sports, like base jumping or big wave surfing, are practised far away from the reach of any authorities. I cannot imagine the police being called to stop people from parachuting off a mountain face or surfing on an isolated beach.

解析:

第二段的榜首句相同照应开篇的观念,一起又作为本段的主题句标明中心思想,即,要想制止极限运动是过错的,也是不可能的。第二句以分句方式从两个方面阐明支撑主题句,即,人们有权决议怎样分配自己的闲余时刻;只需人们了解运动的风险性,政治人士就不用制止人们自行文娱。第三句从另一个旁边面支撑主题句,即有的运动即便想要立法制止也很难实施,例如,蹦极和冲浪。第四句是对第三句支撑,即很难幻想差人怎样可以做到去山上和孤岛去制止蹦极和冲浪。本段的结构和上段相同也是十分明晰的,即,主题句+支撑/扩展句,相同是分观念明晰明晰,证明充沛有力。

结束语:

依据以上两个阶段,可以正常的看到,主体证明段的根本结构是主题句+支撑/扩展句,其含义在于,使用主题句环绕开篇观念明晰表达支撑或扩展的分观念,一起把本段的中心思想表达出来。然后使用其他的语句经过举例、依据、数据、事情等,或陈说或描绘,对本段主题句表达的观念或观念进行相应的证明。但是,许多考生在写主体证明部分的时分,没有结构认识,观念不明晰,证明不充沛,乃至有时分文不对题,偏题或跑题,说不清、道不明。详细说来,便是没有把榜首句当作主题句来写,主题不行单一,或许主题不止一个,然后形成紊乱。一起,也不能把其他的语句当作支撑/扩展句来写,即不环绕主题句,也和上下句没相关,形成上下句不连贯,内容不能很好地阐明中心思想。凡此种种,都极大的影响了,作为主体段的论据证明效果和功用,因此很难写好作文并取得高分。问题是,关于写作主体证明段的结构问题,考生不是不明白,而是关于有必要这样写的必要性和重要含义没有深入的人生,因此不能树立正确的认识,即有必要依照雅思写作考试的要求和评分标准来进行,不然就不契合标准,就达不到方针。所以,不要不以为然,要听劝,就得这么写作文。

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